Doreen Etes Continues
Tuesday, 6 November 2012
WHO IS SHE?
Just looked on my blog - something I haven`t done for ages ( I thought it was dead and buried or floating in the ether of the internet) Saw I had a follower called Funda and wondered who she was - one of my many old students perhaps. Curious
Wednesday, 4 August 2010
Rising above it
Given the choice, I think I preferred the trainers. At least their presence on my tree in my garden wasn`t a mindless drunken act of vandalism that pollutes the green and me, seemingly, whenever I walk on it.
I`ll have to ask Jensen what Jim would have thought about it?
Do even Jenn`s ghosts tut and shake their heads in disillusionment now? - After all - What romance and mystery can there be behind the lobbing of a bag of shit?
Only the now bereft trainer tree seems able to rise above it all!
In an English Country Ga -ah -ah den!!!!!!!!! (An update on Doreen`s garden)
Tuesday, 27 July 2010
The One Minute Makeover
Hi Elaine
I really really really really really love the new look!
You`ll have to tell me where you bought that wonderful transforming magic wand!
Thanks SO much!
xx
I really really really really really love the new look!
You`ll have to tell me where you bought that wonderful transforming magic wand!
Thanks SO much!
xx
Saturday, 24 July 2010
Tuesday, 6 July 2010
Fair comment? Oh Dear!
James has left a new comment on your post "Pilgrimage to Mecca via the Mersey- completed vers...":
Whilst the contrast of different cultures is a legitimate literary device, there is a danger of this turning into a travelogue about Turkey!
There's also too much emphasis on the bladder!
Some nice phrases in this but try to avoid being too didactic. Readers like to be informed but not necessarily lectured!
It's your story, however metaphysical in style. Achieving the closest intimacy with your reader is always desirable but it doesn't include asking your reader questions!
That's bad form. Makes it appear you are running out of things to say. And if you are going to be a good writer that should never be the case. Very good descriptive prose though.
George.
Whilst the contrast of different cultures is a legitimate literary device, there is a danger of this turning into a travelogue about Turkey!
There's also too much emphasis on the bladder!
Some nice phrases in this but try to avoid being too didactic. Readers like to be informed but not necessarily lectured!
It's your story, however metaphysical in style. Achieving the closest intimacy with your reader is always desirable but it doesn't include asking your reader questions!
That's bad form. Makes it appear you are running out of things to say. And if you are going to be a good writer that should never be the case. Very good descriptive prose though.
George.
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